Hax hates some people [An UU Warstory]

Hello, this is my first WarStory I've posted on Smogon. So yes, I'm a noob to WarStories, but not to battling. This battle is against Eon_II, one of my new friends from Shoddy Battle. He seemed to be a very skilled UU battle and this was a really fun battle.

So first, here is my team:



I'll tell you Eon_II's team at the end. So here is some further ado before I present the warstory:

My thoughs are in Blue, and our chat will be in red. The WarStory will be in black.

Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause
Eon_II sent out Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom M).
-Hobo- sent out Platinum (lvl 100 Uxie).
-Hobo- switched in Emerald (lvl 100 Venusaur M).
Ambipom used Taunt.
Emerald fell for the taunt!

-100%
-100%
Wow, that was nice. I was expecting Fake Out, his Taunt was great for me. So now I'm predicting hit to U-turn away, but he doesn't know I'm scarfed. Here is my ticket to removing that annoying beast before it does anything.
---
Emerald used Leaf Storm.
Emerald's attack missed!
Ambipom used U-turn.
Emerald lost 26% of its health.
Eon_II switched in Toxicroak (lvl 100 Toxicroak M).

-74%
-100%
Wow, how lucky of me. Well, he goes to Toxicroak with the Knowledge I'm wearing a scarf, probebly going to Swords Dance or Substiute or something. I immediatly go my Toxicroak counter.
---
-Hobo-: o how nice
-Hobo- switched in Platinum (lvl 100 Uxie).
Toxicroak used Substitute.
Toxicroak lost 25% of its health.
Toxicroak made a substitute!
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-100%
-81% + Substiute-25%
Yep, he Sub'd. Now I can't hit him with a surprise Psychic without him knowing, just my luck again. Why couldn't he have Swords Danced? I can survive Adamant 252 Life Orb Swords Dance Sucker Punch. Oh well.
---
Toxicroak used Stone Edge.
Platinum lost 20% of its health.
Platinum used Psychic.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Toxicroak!
Toxicroak's substitute faded!
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-80%
-87%
Wow, Stone Edge? Weird Toxicroak, It should at least have Ice Punch, but no Sucker Punch? Maybe be was predicting me to Stealth Rock or something.
---
Eon_II switched in Claydol (lvl 100 Claydol).
Platinum used Psychic.
It's not very effective...
Claydol lost 9% of its health.
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 6% of its health.

-80%
-97%
Ok, I knew something like that would happen. I'm 100% sure he has Rapid Spin, but I'll go for the Stealth Rock anyway.
---
Platinum used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!
Claydol used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 3% of its health.

-80%
-100%
So we both have rocks up, and now he's going to spin them. How predictable. Might as well Rain Dance while he spins.
---
Platinum used Rain Dance.
Rain began to fall!
Claydol used Rapid Spin.
Claydol blew away the pointed stones!
Platinum lost 2% of its health.
The rain continues to fall.

-78%
-100%
Yeah, I was right, just as predicted.
---
-Hobo-: knew it >:D
Eon_II: XD Original, huh?
Eon_II switched in Mismagius (lvl 100 Mismagius M).
Platinum used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Mismagius lost 10% of its health.
-Hobo-: xD
-Hobo- switched in Limestone (lvl 100 Kabutops M).
Pointed stones dug into Limestone.
Limestone lost 12% of its health.
The rain continues to fall.
Mismagius's leftovers restored its health a little!
Mismagius restored 6% of its health.

-88%
-96%
Ok, so I know I can OHKO with Waterfall. Every Missy seems to stay in as it watches me slowly rip apart his ghost to it's demise.
---
Limestone used Waterfall.
Mismagius lost 96% of its health.
Eon_II's Mismagius fainted.
Limestone lost 10% of its health.
The rain continues to fall.

-78%
-0%
Just as I though. He has Toxicroak, why?
---
-Hobo-: I don't understand
Eon_II: Damn it, i run that kabutops set in ubers, its awesome XD
-Hobo-: Every keep Missy in when I have
"Every keep Missy in when I have"? My mind must have been really scrambled from all the prediction.
Eon_II switched in Claydol (lvl 100 Claydol).
-Hobo-: kabutops out
Eon_II: Yeah, trying to will-o-wsip
-Hobo-: arent they scarred of OHKO?.. Yeah, I was thinking hard.
-Hobo-: oh
Eon_II: I was running a bulkier set, so i kind of hoped she'd survive =p
Eon_II switched in Toxicroak (lvl 100 Toxicroak M).
Limestone used Waterfall.
Toxicroak's Dry Skin absorbed damage!
Toxicroak restored 12% of its health.
The rain continues to fall.
Toxicroak soaked up rain!

-78%
-100%
Smart move on his part, stalling out rain as well as my PP and healing his Toxicroak. I though it was over.
---
Limestone used Rock Slide.
It's not very effective...
Toxicroak lost 42% of its health.
Limestone lost 10% of its health.
Toxicroak flinched!
The rain continues to fall.
Toxicroak soaked up rain!
Toxicroak restored 12% of its health.
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-68%
-76%
Lol, that was Lucky, but even with 42% resisted hits, he gets 18% back. I can't flinch him that much, I'll just have to save him as a fodder.
---
Toxicroak used Sucker Punch.
Limestone lost 30% of its health.
Limestone used Rock Slide.
It's not very effective...
Toxicroak lost 43% of its health.
Limestone lost 10% of its health.
The rain continues to fall.
Toxicroak soaked up rain!
Toxicroak restored 12% of its health.
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-28%
-53%
Ugh, this is going to take some prediction to take down. I'll have to Psychic it.
---
-Hobo- switched in Gold (lvl 100 Gorebyss M).
Pointed stones dug into Gold.
Gold lost 12% of its health.
Toxicroak used Substitute.
Toxicroak lost 25% of its health.
Toxicroak made a substitute!
The rain continues to fall.
Toxicroak soaked up rain!
Toxicroak restored 12% of its health.
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-100%
-46% + Substitute-25%
Seriously? More Sub's? Ugh, I don't know what to do here.
---
Toxicroak is tightening its focus!
Gold used Psychic.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Toxicroak!
Toxicroak's substitute faded!
Toxicroak used Focus Punch.
Gold lost 88% of its health.
-Hobo-'s Gold fainted.
The rain stopped.
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-0%
-52%
Well, his Sub and the rain are both gone, while I've just lost my best sweeper. Hopefully I can hit him with HP Ground before he predicts me.
---
-Hobo- switched in Emerald (lvl 100 Venusaur M).
Pointed stones dug into Emerald.
Emerald lost 12% of its health.
Eon_II switched in Moltres (lvl 100 Moltres).
Moltres is exerting its pressure!
Emerald used Hidden Power.
It doesn't affect Moltres...

-61%
-100%
Just my luck, He knows I'm going to swith, so I might as well to something that resists both his STABs.
---
-Hobo- switched in Limestone (lvl 100 Kabutops M).
Pointed stones dug into Limestone.
Limestone lost 12% of its health.
Moltres used U-turn.
A critical hit!
Limestone lost 16% of its health.
-Hobo-'s Limestone fainted.
Eon_II switched in Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom M).

-0%
-100%
Wonderfull, he gets a critical hit. If only that Leaf Storm hit!
---
-Hobo- switched in Diamond (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Diamond.
Diamond lost 6% of its health.
Ambipom used Taunt.
Diamond fell for the taunt!
Diamond used Rain Dance.
Diamond can't use Rain Dance after the taunt!

-94%
-100%
So, I'm screwed. I can't explode because I know I need to explode on Moltres, otherwise I can't kill it, so I need to switch to Venusaur.
---
-Hobo- switched in Emerald (lvl 100 Venusaur ?).
Pointed stones dug into Emerald.
Emerald lost 12% of its health.
Ambipom used Low Kick.
It's not very effective...
Emerald lost 15% of its health.

-34%
-100%
Ok, not much of a threat. I knew he'd switch, so I Sleep Powder because it can sweep the rest of his team with Ambi gone.
---
Eon_II switched in Moltres (lvl 100 Moltres).
Moltres is exerting its pressure!
Emerald used Sleep Powder.
Emerald's attack missed!

-34%
-100%
Cool.
---
Eon_II: >< Harsh miss hax today...
-Hobo-: ik
Emerald used Sleep Powder.
Moltres fell asleep!
Moltres is fast asleep!

-34%
-100% + ZzZ
Oh well, either way he's asleep.
---
-Hobo-: with leaf storm too
Eon_II: Yeah, saw
Eon_II switched in Toxicroak (lvl 100 Toxicroak M).
-Hobo- switched in Platinum (lvl 100 Uxie).
Pointed stones dug into Platinum.
Platinum lost 12% of its health.
Toxicroak's leftovers restored its health a little!
Toxicroak restored 6% of its health.

-66%
-46%
Yes! I can finally destroy that croaking beast.
---
Toxicroak used Sucker Punch.
It's super effective!
Platinum lost 33% of its health.
Platinum used Psychic.
It's super effective!
Toxicroak lost 58% of its health.
Eon_II's Toxicroak fainted.

-33%
-0%
There we go! The problem is that Sucker Punch really wore me down. I'm ready to be revenged.
---
Eon_II switched in Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom ?).
Ambipom used Fake Out.
Platinum lost 19% of its health.
Platinum flinched!

-14%
-100%
Wow, I survived? Nice. Guess I'll go to Registeel to take the U-turn/Return.
---
-Hobo- switched in Diamond (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Diamond.
Diamond lost 6% of its health.
Ambipom used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Diamond lost 7% of its health.
Eon_II switched in Sceptile (lvl 100 Sceptile M).

-81%
-100%
Well, I know I can take anything it has, so I'll just attack it.
---
Sceptile used Focus Blast.
It's super effective!
Diamond lost 44% of its health.
Diamond used Seismic Toss.
Sceptile lost 36% of its health.

-37%
-64%
Well, seeing how little I did to him, I need to switch. I'll use Uxie as a fodder.
---
-Hobo- switched in Platinum (lvl 100 Uxie).
Pointed stones dug into Platinum.
Platinum lost 12% of its health.
-Hobo-'s Platinum fainted.
Sceptile used Focus Blast.
But there was no target!

-0%
-64%
Just as expected. Now I'll try my Venusaur to remove Sceptile from the game.
---
-Hobo- switched in Emerald (lvl 100 Venusaur ?).
Pointed stones dug into Emerald.
Emerald lost 12% of its health.
Emerald used Sludge Bomb.
It's super effective!
Sceptile lost 64% of its health.
Eon_II's Sceptile fainted.

-22%
-0%
Awesome, now I can kill Moltres too.
---
Eon_II switched in Moltres (lvl 100 Moltres).
Moltres is exerting its pressure!
Emerald used Sludge Bomb.
Moltres lost 45% of its health.
Moltres is fast asleep!
-22%
-55%
---
Emerald used Sludge Bomb.
Moltres lost 45% of its health.
Moltres is fast asleep!
-22%
-10%
---
Eon_II switched in Claydol (lvl 100 Claydol).
Emerald used Sludge Bomb.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Claydol lost 35% of its health.
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 6% of its health.

-22%
-71%
So he tries to wake up, didn't happen. The crit was pretty lucky, but I don't think it will matter at this point.
---
-Hobo- switched in Torquoise (lvl 100 Ludicolo M).
Pointed stones dug into Torquoise.
Torquoise lost 12% of its health.
Claydol used Earth Power.
It's not very effective...
Torquoise lost 14% of its health.
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 6% of its health.

-74%
-77%
So I send out Ludicolo to take the predicted Earth Power and Surf him.
---
Eon_II switched in Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom M).
Torquoise used Surf.
Ambipom lost 93% of its health.
Torquoise lost 10% of its health.

-64%
-7%
He switches to Ambipom to take the Surf, but decides not to die.
---
Ambipom used Fake Out.
Torquoise lost 50% of its health.
Torquoise flinched!

-14%
-7%
50%? Wow, pethetic. This is just horrible.
---
Ambipom used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Torquoise lost 14% of its health.
-Hobo-'s Torquoise fainted.
Eon_II switched in Claydol (lvl 100 Claydol).
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 6% of its health.

-0%
-77%
Well, Ludi failed me. Lets see if I can get lucky or something.
---
Eon_II: I run ludi in ubers too XD This is such a badass team...
-Hobo- switched in Emerald (lvl 100 Venusaur ?).
Pointed stones dug into Emerald.
Emerald lost 12% of its health.
-Hobo-: lol thanks
-Hobo-: I know
-Hobo-: you will switch
-Hobo-: to Moltres
-Hobo-: >:D
Eon_II: Lol, will i let moltres die or claydol? Choices XD
-Hobo-: xD
Eon_II switched in Moltres (lvl 100 Moltres).
Moltres is exerting its pressure!
Emerald used Leaf Storm.
It's not very effective...
Moltres lost 10% of its health.
Eon_II's Moltres fainted.
Emerald's special attack was harshly lowered.

-10%
-0%
Wow, didn't that expect that to kill it. Good Job Venusaur.
---
Eon_II switched in Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom M).
Emerald used Leaf Storm.
Ambipom lost 7% of its health.
Eon_II's Ambipom fainted.
Emerald's special attack was harshly lowered.

-10%
-0%
No Fake Out? Wow, well Ambipom is over. The problem is I can't switch Venusaur out to lose his -4 or rocks will kill him. I'll just go for the Leaf Storm.
---
-Hobo-: :O
Eon_II switched in Claydol (lvl 100 Claydol).
-Hobo-: predicting a switch?
Eon_II: Yep XD Oh well...
-Hobo-: dude
-Hobo-: this is an epic battle :O
Emerald used Leaf Storm.
It's super effective!
Claydol lost 60% of its health.
Emerald's special attack was harshly lowered.
Claydol used Earth Power.
Emerald lost 9% of its health.
-Hobo-'s Emerald fainted.
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 6% of its health.

-0%
-24%
-4 Leaf Storm does 60%? Nice. Well, Great job Venusaur. You did super well.
---
-Hobo- switched in Diamond (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Diamond.
Diamond lost 6% of its health.
-Hobo-: it's all up to this
-Hobo-: if you can KO me with EP
-Hobo-: you win
Claydol used Earth Power.
It's super effective!
Diamond lost 29% of its health.
Diamond used Shadow Claw.
It's super effective!
Claydol lost 23% of its health.
Claydol's leftovers restored its health a little!
Claydol restored 6% of its health.

-3%
-7%
How did that not kill him? WHAT? Wow, if I had done 1% more damage, I would have won, but I just lost.
---
-Hobo-: =[
Claydol used Earth Power.
It's super effective!
Diamond lost 2% of its health.
-Hobo-'s Diamond fainted.
Eon_II wins!
Eon_II: XD
-Hobo-: gg
Eon_II: Really close game there, gg =)
-Hobo-: gg
-Hobo-: dude
-Hobo-: do you mind
-Hobo-: if I post this battle
-Hobo-: on smogon?
Eon_II: Lol, the forum? Yeah, feel free
-Hobo-: k thanks :)
Eon_II: I still need to sign up on there XD

Props
-Venusaur doing so well
-Kabutops KOing Missy
-Moltres staying asleep
-Registeel taking Focus Blast like a boss
-Venusaur being so strong on Claydol
-Uxie finally killing Toxicroak.
Slops
-Leaf Storm missing, causing me the game.
-Ludicolo taking so much damage
-Me losing
-Eon for not having a smogon account (j/k :P)

Well thanks everyone for reading, hoped you like it!


Eon_II's team.

P.S.: My team can be found in depth in my sig.
 
I don't normally post. In fact, this is probably my first. But since I see no other comments, I think I'll chime in.

As most will probably say soon, your comments are rather lacking. As I peruse my memory of the highest rated war stories, I recall that the best always had depth behind their commentary; they included what thoughts whirred in their minds after each move, and weaved for readers the logic behind their own choices throughout the battle. Unfortunately, your commentary remains lacking as it only seems to announce what has happened, without adding any substance.

The battle was alright, but the comments prevented me from developing more than just a slight interest in the story.

Perhaps you can edit them and add some of that depth. If you want a good, or even a great war story, I suggest you do.
 
Well, I know I can take anything it [Sceptile] has, so I'll [Registeel] just attack it.
Why wouldn't you set up the rain? The only thing that stopped Registeel earlier was Ambipom Taunting it, but this would have given Ludicolo the chance to sweep.
 
Lcubed: I don't really know how to make interesting comments lol this is my first warstory but I can try to make them more interesting.

ARandomDude: yeah I probebly should change the title >_>/

red Ink: Your right, I should have set up rain then exploded on Sceptile, but can't change that now.
 
As ARandomDude already said by reading the title you can already understand who is going to win and this made the reading less enjoyable.

In general haxy battles aren't great warstories, even if the battle itself was close in the end.
 
Hax doesn't make a warstory bad, as long as the person experiencing the hax pulls through using incredible mental processes which are revealed to the reader :)

It was fairly close, sure, but there wasn't a huge deal of second guessing a nail biting which make warstories really enjoyable.
 
So, I finally got this account thing sorted. Hey.

Just thought I'd chime in with my opinion on warstories in general here- hax is pretty much a fact of life with pokemon, so surely expecting a war story to be completely unaffected by it is pretty unreasonable...? From a narrative perspective it changes the pace and tone of a battle in unexpected and therefore interesting ways too. Sure, it may not be as satisfying as a masterful prediction, but the way someone brings it up in every warstory thread as if it killed the whole intrigue of reading through the battle feels a lot like overkill.

Hax aside, I agree you should add a bit more detail to explaining your thought processes next time, just to keep the narrative flowing throughout. Still, enjoyable story, and it was great fun battling with you. Here's hoping that if we battle again the RNG hates you a little less.
 
It was a close battle, though as previously stated, haxy battles are usually not the best warstory material. Your comments were a bit lacking but overall it was ok. Good lukc in the future.
 

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