Wow. I did not expect this much feedback! Thanks to all of you for all of your critiques/criticism (both positive and negative), I'll definitely make sure all of the percentages are right before I attempt another warstory (thanks to Jimera0 for the suggestion about using the replay viewer, I'll do that next time), and I will wait until I am better at battling and get a better battle. I just have one question, and it is for Verbatim. How/why would crustle be the better choice for a custap/explosion set? Gigalith gets the stone edge/earthquake combo for almost perfect coverage and has 40 more base attack.
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Victini's Wrath
- Thread starter Fuhreena
- Start date
Sorry, but this wasn't a great Warstory. Your format was fantastic, but the battle was pretty bad. Your opponent made many stupid moves (such as switching in Mismagius when he had a Heracross waiting in the wings. On your part, switching in Gengar to Jolteon was equally foolish. The biggest deal breaker, however, was the horrible hax at the end.
4.5/10. That's probably a little harsh for a first war story, but the battle was simply horrible. If you can find a compelling battle and work on your commentaries, I'm sure you'll be writing 9s and 10s in no time. Good luck!
4.5/10. That's probably a little harsh for a first war story, but the battle was simply horrible. If you can find a compelling battle and work on your commentaries, I'm sure you'll be writing 9s and 10s in no time. Good luck!
Quite frankly, Crustle can use the second turn to get a layer of spikes up in addition to his stealth rocks. Though to be honest, if you want rocks up guaranteed Deoxys-S is the best option hands down.
well i have to agree with verbatim, Alphatron's HP Percent Messages are f*cking epic but, we shouldnt copy them... also i got somewhat dissapointed when you didnt check pkmns base speed during the battle, asuming something is what a noob does, checking and calculating during battles is the way pros role. overall 6/10
The fact that your opponent won with hax was a huge turn-off.
5/10
5/10
Commentary and formatting made up for the mediocre battle.
It was okay,mediocre movements and hax ruined it 4/10
They aren't epic. They are annoying as heck. People should stop doing that.
But on to the story rate.
Average battle.
Opponent probably copied a Jolteon set that had those exact moves (Probably a Serebii) and just chose Ice because "It hits dragons" (Why most people chose). Also teams were not that good overall (Props for Gastrodon though)
I like the fact that you lost in this story. Not many people actually post ones they lose. The title gave away the battle quickly exspecially when I saw whose team Victini was on.
Overall 3/10
Well, your format was good. Pick a better battle next time, mkay?
Format: 8/10
Commentary: 4/10
Battle: 2/10
Format: 8/10
Commentary: 4/10
Battle: 2/10